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I was bored. I was sitting in the adjustable Star Trek chair down at Western Dental, and they were dawdling, taking forever to get to me.
I'd already read the torn-up, ancient issue of Cosmopolitan cover to cover, and there was nothing left to divert me but my imagination.

I closed my eyes. Have you ever really looked into the darkness when you close your eyes? Don't.
I stared hard until the colours began to resolve into shapes. I thought it was just my imagination seeing something where there was nothing, no different than staring into the clouds and seeing bunny rabbits, but the visions in my eyelids were not innocent little fluffy bunnies. They were monstrous faces and twisted bodies. They were humanoid, but hunched and deformed. Some had clear signs of rot. Some had dark, empty, dead eyes that looked straight into my own. They saw me looking at them and they weren't happy.

I don't know where they came from. Maybe they came in when I was dreaming. That doesn't make sense, but nothing has made sense since I looked into the darkness inside my eyes. Now I can't close them. I can't even blink. My eyelids have been taped up for days. They don't hide anymore behind the darkness and the void. I've seen them and they know it.

I can't live like this. My eyes burn so much. I am so tired. I'll have to kill myself, to end this. But I have a problem. They say that death is just like sleeping, and if I sleep, they'll be there. If I retreat into the darkness, they will be there, waiting, ready to get me.
©2009 =mngamojemo
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Based on a true story. :iconsothereplz:

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:iconstumptastic:
Wow. That was great.
It had imense depth; it gave me a chill. But at the same time, it gave the feeling that something would happen. Something would have to happen the next time I closed my eyes. is that your way of ensuring readers finish this!? To make sure they CANNOT close their eyes; can't stop? XDXD

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Finally the hills are without eyes, they are tired of painting
A dead man's face red with their own blood.
They used to love, having so much to lose
Blink your eyes just once, and see everthing in ruins
:iconcel3131:
Oooh I really liked that.

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What's the difference between a duck? One of its legs is both the same.
:iconmngamojemo:
Um, yes. That was my plan all along. :paranoid:

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...and my axe.
:iconmngamojemo:
Gracias.

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...and my axe.
:iconstumptastic:
XD

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Finally the hills are without eyes, they are tired of painting
A dead man's face red with their own blood.
They used to love, having so much to lose
Blink your eyes just once, and see everthing in ruins
:iconmrkylhappy:
All I have is questions,but I'll be merciful and ask only one(more or less a question within a question).What did they have you on or what did you take before going to the dentist?

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To the Hell with today,bring on tomorrow.
To the Hell with tomorrow,bring on next year.
:iconmngamojemo:
Boredom. Sheer boredom.

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...and my axe.
:iconmrkylhappy:
I know what you mean.
One time when I went in for a cleaning,I made sure that I was very sleepy so that I could just snooze through the proceedure.
It kind of/sort of worked.

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To the Hell with today,bring on tomorrow.
To the Hell with tomorrow,bring on next year.
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They saw me looking at them and they weren't happy.

That line was rather childish, in my opinion. I would remove the words "weren't happy" and replace them with something far more dramatic, scary, or emotional. Something like, "They saw me looking at them and thus they drew closer, peering menacingly, trying to decide how best to attack and devour - soul and all."

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